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Commentary - Homecoming
the director's cut
by Raven
Requested by Leigh.
The basic plotline for this fic is one I’ve called a fandom
rite of passage that everyone has to write – I have this fic, Leigh has Never
Ask Why Build, Meredith has a A Still, Small Voice, and I’m sure there are more
out there. The interesting thing is how differently they set up the idea, but
they all have the same outcome. Moving on, then...
One look at my Hawk, and I knew he’d have a hard life.
Even before everything that happened, I knew it.
I still don’t know why I chose Daniel Pierce as my POV character, especially
as I didn’t have any idea how to characterise him. I suppose he’s more or less
an original character, with some similarities to Hawkeye.
A small town, this is. It’s small and it’ll always be that way, surrounded on so
many sides by ocean. It’s not an island, but it could be. There aren’t many
people, and they all know each other, and they always have and they always will,
unto the final generation. The people are a part of their town, and the town is
a part of the land, a part of the sea, and my Hawk is part of all three and
something different besides.
For some reason, his voice seemed to want to be like this – simple, but with
quite a bit of resonance, shown in the Biblical quote in this section.
He’s different. He calls himself a doctor; and he is, he’s a good one. Better
than good. He calls himself a small-town doctor; and that’s where he’s wrong.
I’m the physician round here. I know the people and they know me. I’m as much a
part of the town as the stonework and mortar, and I’m as predictable as it too;
steady, reliable, unchanging, everything you want in your family doctor. I only
ever did one remotely unusual thing in my life, and that was to call my only
child after a character in a book no-one’d ever heard of. It’s a classic, but
try telling that to a town of lobster-fanciers. They’re good people, but English
literature isn’t their strong suit.
And as I have been told many times since, that should have been American
literature. My bad.
That’s “call,” not “name” – he’s got a proper real name. Whatever that means. In
my mind his name is whatever he answers to; but the US government wanted his
“real name” when they drafted him, and who am I to quibble?
Again with the simple way of thinking, but simple doesn’t mean stupid. In his
own way, Daniel perceives quite a lot.
It’s a good name. Benjamin Franklin, hero in his own time, and not allowed to
work on the Declaration of Independence for fear he’d put a joke in it. I can’t
hear that story and not think of...
Hawk.
That titbit about Benjamin Franklin is true as far as I know; I have a
horrible feeling I wrote this fic just so I could put that in.
Hawk-eye, white hunter, last ally of the last of the Mohican tribe, through to
the tragic, bitter end. I fear that story now. I don’t have my copy any more; I
gave it to Hawkeye. It’s his story, now.
II’ve always liked the parallels between Hawkeye and his namesake. They have
some similarities, but tragedy was always going to be a major connecting theme.
I’m sorry, Hawk, but your story isn’t the story of a small-town doctor.
Not you, with that strangeness about you that has always been there, lurking at
the corner of my eyes when I look at you.
It’s not the charm that I’m thinking of, though there is that. Oh, Hawkeye’s got
that kind of charm, the kind politicians and bureaucrats dream of possessing,
but them that’s got it don’t abuse it that way. My son is Tuesday’s child, full
of grace, eloquent as hell, can sweet-talk his way out of anything in this world
or the other. Everything he touches turns to silver. I like that; sometimes his
charm even works on me, and I always thank the powers that be that my Hawk will
never be lost for words. But it’s not that.
It’s not that. It’s something else. Something that comes through most clearly
when he’s overtired, and I know when he’s really exhausted, so far gone he can
barely stand, he loses whatever it is that keeps his thoughts inside his head.
The way he talks, sometimes, of cabbages and kings, makes me wonder whether it’s
him who’s speaking at all, or something deep inside him, something from
somewhere else. It’s so hard to explain, to describe, but whatever-it-is, it
clings to him. It’s a touch of the netherworld, where his mother has gone, where
the men whose blood covered his hands went to, somewhere far beyond this mortal
coil, and Hawkeye carries it with him as careless as if it were an old glove.
It’s that strangeness that makes his eyes blue.
This is where the subtlety comes in. I have to admit to liking this paragraph
– it more or less wrote itself, which is always good – because it really
emphasises the fact Hawkeye was never quite normal even before the war.
He’s lucky. Strange, and silver-tongued, and so talented, and I knew from the
start he wasn’t meant to live, grow old and die in Crabapple Cove. I knew he
would be drafted long before he did, long before the US government did. I knew
his hands would be covered in the blood of soldiers, not children recently
fallen from old apple trees and rushed to the family doctor.
Because this is true, isn’t it? Hawkeye’s talent as a surgeon would never
have been put to use without Korea.
I was even afraid he wasn’t meant to live at all. Not when he’s come so close to
the otherworld, he’s not a part of this one any more.
He’s so close to me, he’s my son; and he’s so far away, buried in his own mind,
so different from how he used to be.
Especially now. I knew when he shouted his goodbyes, laughing and swinging into
a rising aeroplane, that I’d never see him again. I’d see the man he was to
become, but not the child he was.
And I was right. When he came back he was different. Changed. In the dark of the
evening, the strangeness seems to take over his personality. And he’s such a
part of me that it begins to overpower me, too, and that’s when I start to feel
frightened.
I haven’t done any psychiatry since med school. But even I know sometimes the
only thing that can be done is to get the patient to talk. Doesn’t matter what
about. Get him to tell you what he had for breakfast this morning. Get him to
explain how to mix a Martini in three easy steps. That’s the recurring theme.
Easy steps. Everything happens gradually. It’s easy enough when you read it in
the book.
More simple language that does its best to flow from one idea to the next.
It’s even easy enough with a patient, if you follow the simple guidelines. Treat
each one as an individual, try and get to know them while staying detached,
slowly guide them until they can finally bring the horror through to the
conscious mind and deal with it on its own terms.
But I tell you when it’s not easy. It’s when you reach the words “while staying
detached” and feel like laughing and crying at the same time, because the
“patient” is your own son, and the horror that lurks within him lurks within
you, too, and there’s nothing you can do is wait for the storm to be over.
Something of a dichotomy there – there’s a reason why doctors aren’t allowed
to treat their family members. This sort of conflict must be very difficult.
And it’s even harder when the storm refuses to begin.
It’s not hard to get Hawkeye to talk. It never has been, for as long as I can
remember. There’s a lot going on behind those big blue eyes, and more often than
not, he’ll cheerfully let his thoughts spout forth like a torrent, confusing his
listeners half to death. The same thing happens when you put a pen in his hand.
I kept all the letters he sent me when he was over there, because they were just
so Hawkeye. Ironically funny, often bittersweet, sometimes depressing, always
honest, and his words are so much of a part of him that if I threw them away I’d
be throwing him away.
And he lights up when he talks, he really does. I knew Trapper John; he and Hawk
were friends in college, but it’s not just him who comes to life when Hawkeye
talks. They all do. I feel I understand why Klinger wore dresses, why Colonel
Henry Blake “couldn’t make a decision with a month’s notice,” why Colonel Potter
kept a mare, why BJ wrote letters to his dog, why Radar knew about things before
they happened, and why Hawkeye loves to talk about them.
I wanted to bring them in somewhere, because the fic is getting too wrapped
up in itself. I tried to bring in only the really salient details about each
character – my favourite was the one about BJ and his dog.
He loved them.
Loved. In Hawkeye’s mind, everything is past tense. Crabapple Cove is a place
where time stands still.
During the show, Hawkeye idealised Crabapple Cove, and I couldn’t bear to
write as if those idealised illusions were shattered, so I put this instead to
show that one thing Hawkeye likes about the place is that it doesn’t change. He
can’t go home again, but that’s only because he’s changed – the town itself
hasn’t.
Making him talk is easy. But he’s a carefully objective observer, my Hawk;
trying to make him comment on his own feelings is proving difficult. They tell
me he came very close to the edge near the end, and looking at him now I can
believe it. He watches me watching him, daring me to come out with whatever I’m
thinking, and little does he know that I’m thinking how much I love him.
Another simple detail.
I sometimes wonder what I’m doing, keeping Hawk here. Sometimes I wonder if he
needs the kind of help I can’t give him. Help from someone who isn’t digging out
decades-old psych notes from a beat-up old box. But then I see him, barefoot in
his raggedy old red robe, walking over the wet grass and smiling to himself, and
I know the soft air of his home is doing more for him than anything else can,
even me. They’ll never take him away from here again. Not if the President of
the United States himself came down and asked him. Hawkeye is a part of this
place, so much a part of it you might as well try to draft the sea breeze.
But then I wish...
I do wish. I hate myself for wishing it, but I do. I wish Hawkeye would
just... crack.
That’s a terrible thing for anyone, especially a parent, to say. But I try to be
honest. Like Hawkeye does.
I wish it because then maybe my son would come back to me. He’s so much better
than he was. He was burnt-out and exhausted when at last he came home; he slept
for a day and a night, and when morning came, he hardly spoke for hours, eyes
wide, drinking it all in. He might have been destined for higher things, he
might have been a part of a greater cause thousands of miles off, but this is
his home. I thought maybe, maybe, Crabapple Cove will bring him back.
But he’s still not back, not my son, because he drifts off sometimes and I can’t
follow him. And I can’t help but feel that as long as he stays like this,
wide-eyed and vacant, sometimes with a smile, sometimes with tears in his eyes
he thinks I can’t see, the pressure will keep on building up, crack. And only
then can I feel I’m being as supportive, as compassionate as I’d like to be if
only he would let me.
He’s so used to making it on his own, he thinks there’s no other way.
Catharsis. Beautiful word. But Hawkeye’s a tough nut to crack.
A little black humour – “nut” has two meanings.
It’s strange that Hawkeye’s anger has always been turned in on himself. Anger
turned inwards is depression. In some ways it’s a blessing, as I know his
temper. He flares up and down, quickly, painlessly. But when he’s really angry,
honestly furious, in a long-term sort of way, it turns inwards quicker than
quick. I’ve seen it happen so many times, and I worry. Hawkeye is too passionate
to live long with his soul intact. Those who suffer from apathy also suffer from
a good night’s sleep each and every night. I can’t remember the last time I
didn’t check up on Hawkeye of a night, just in case.
How does Hawkeye sleep at night, with his tendency to take everything to
heart? I can’t help but think this attribute of his was something he had even
before the war.
In case of what, I don’t know. Just in case.
Foreshadowing there.
Sometimes Hawkeye murmurs names in his sleep.
I can’t be blamed for wondering. As well as three years of his life, what else
did Hawk leave behind him in Korea?
I have always liked this sentence for absolutely no reason.
He’s not one for the pursuit of true love. I think Carlye was too much for him
at the time. She didn’t treat him too well, and he didn’t treat her too well,
and it all ended in metaphorical tears, when she left him and he was moody and
drank a lot.
Again with the simplicity of it; those last few words in particular are so
simplistic, but they say everything they need to say. I hope.
He mentioned in a letter he’d run into her again out there. He glossed over it,
but knowing him, something happened that he isn’t telling me. But if he doesn’t
want to tell me, I won’t ask, it’s none of my business.
In short, he’s paraphrasing “Don’t ask, don’t tell”, which has its more
specific implications.
But she might not be all, and I’m aware of that fact. There’s other people,
other affairs, love and more base considerations, and hell knows Hawk isn’t
choosy. Well, he is, but in certain matters, he’s not. I worried about that
tendency of his, in the military, but he’s got a brain in his head. Don’t ask,
don’t tell, and I won’t, on both counts. But I knew Trapper John, you see. I
can’t help but wonder.
And I had to bring Trapper into it too. OTP. :)
In recent days, Hawkeye seems calmer. Every night for a week, I’ve checked up on
him and he’s been sleeping soundly, and somehow my own sleep has been the
sounder for it.
I wasn’t sure if anyone would pick up on this, but I remember that a few
people did, notably
dougs.
In a person who has been depressed for a long time, this is not a good
sign. It might well indicate they’ve made their peace with the world as
preparation to leave it.
During the day, he drifts less and smiles more, and is helping me with my
practice. I know better than to ask him to do anything; he does everything
that’s needed. He treats patients, the milder cases, the children mostly because
they prefer him to me, makes out prescriptions, runs into the dispensary when we
need something then and there, and when the ever-present fatigue threatens
behind his eyes, I make him stop. No working to the point of exhaustion, not
here. But it’s a conditioned response and I’m having to break him of it.
I hadn’t seen GFA when I wrote this. That reference to children was just
something I wrote; I didn’t know about Hawkeye’s discomfort around them.
In the calm of the evening, when we’re done for the day, he tells me he’s tired
and slips away. I’m pleased; it’s something he used to do, before. He’s lying to
me, and he knows I know he knows I know, because that’s not the point. I don’t
expect his steady tread on the floorboards above my head; I know where he’s
gone. I can hear the front gate click. His footfalls are silent on the wet
grass, but I fancy I can hear them recede. I don’t know where it is he goes, and
I don’t need to know; all I need is to be here when he gets back. I know he
likes the night; maybe he feels he can hide in it, or maybe that’s just my inner
psychiatrist talking. Hawkeye was born at night, under a starry sky, and I feel
the starlight that shone on him then shines on him now, drawing him out in the
dark of the night. There’s strange powers at work under cover of darkness – the
darkness of the night, the darkness of shadows, the darkness of despair, the
darkness that lurks in men’s souls. It’s that darkness that makes them go to
war.
There’s darkness inside Hawkeye, and no probing scalpel would ever touch it, but
it’s there nonetheless.
There is. He’s not sweetness and light; he’s certainly capable of doing some
very unsavoury things.
There isn’t always a scientific way to explain things, especially not here in
Crabapple Cove. The odd thing is that Hawkeye, card-carrying sceptic as he is,
wouldn’t believe me if I told him so. He’s a living, breathing example of things
not always being what they seem, and he doesn’t see it himself.
Ah, well, that’s my Hawk. A mess of contradictions.
Time is slow tonight. I sit, and I wait, and I think, and all the time the
clock’s ticking gets slower and slower until I feel I’m hearing it from
somewhere far away. I hear him come back as if in a dream; I’ve begun to realise
I need sleep, too. I wait for the gentle footsteps to fade away. He’s gone to
bed, I know, and slowly I get to my own feet and follow him up the wooden
stairs. I check the front door is locked, I kick closed the door to the
dispensary, which someone has left open, and I try not to let the floorboards
creak too much under my tired feet. The air is warm and scented, as the windows
have been left open. I know I’ll sleep well. At least, I will if Hawkeye does.
I wanted this to be slow, dreamy, setting up the tone for what’s to come,
hence the minute detail in the description. Also, the dispensary – more
foreshadowing.
I open his door and look in on him, and know something I didn’t know before.
Hawkeye lies sprawled under a blanket. His bare feet are poking out from under
its frayed edges. He’s always slept like this, even when he was a child.
His hair is a sharp dark contrast to the white of the sheet under his head, and
it’s longer than it was, covering his eyes. I brush it away, feel his breathing
on my hand, and his eyes flicker for a moment, giving me a glimpse of blue.
After a moment his eyes open properly. Pupils dilated, unfocused, he isn’t
looking at me or through me, but beyond me, to something more than this,
something only my son can see. The room is quiet. A night breeze drifts in
through the window; I can hear the swish of wings as a dove falls into free
flight, a white shape that passes the glass and is gone.
Peace.
Hawkeye murmurs in his sleep, turning slightly away from me, eyes closing for
the last time.
I reach for his outstretched hand, and force him to uncurl his fingers. The last
of the pills spill out into my hand.
Inevitable, wasn’t it.
One look at my Hawk, and I knew.
And he did know all along that this would happen eventually. There’s such
inevitability about it, if I may use that word, and you can see that in the
sheer volume of fics with this basic premise. I’m pretty sure this did happen –
no happy ending for Hawkeye, because he was too far gone.